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The Generation Y, aged from 18 to 27 and for the greater part middle-class, has always known prosperous times, but nowadays it has to face its first recession and a tougher prospective economic climate. While only few of the Generation Y-ers fear the ongoing credit crunch, the majority of these young people isn't that bothered. Perhaps Generation Y-ers aren't wrong to stay optimistic as they will still find jobs and be able to feed themselves, but they should be worried about the fact that interests of their bank loans have already increased hugely and mortgages for future housing are becoming very scarce. It's clear that these youngsters will be affected and that they will have to show active resistance to consumerism and adjust their aspirations to a new socio-economic environment.
Caroline De Bondt
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The Generation Y [No 'the' here], aged from 18 to 27 and for the greater part middle-class, [no comma here] has always known prosperous times, but nowadays it has to face its first recession and a tougher prospective [bit heavy: a tougher economic future] economic climate. While only few of the Generation Y-ers [while only few of Generation Y fear...] fear the ongoing credit crunch, the majority of these young people isn't [majority ARE] that bothered. Perhaps Generation Y-ers aren't wrong to stay optimistic as they will still find jobs and be able to feed themselves, but they should be worried about the fact that interests of their bank loans have already increased hugely and mortgages for future housing are becoming very scarce. It's clear that these youngsters will be affected and that they will have to show active resistance to consumerism and adjust their aspirations to a new socio-economic environment.
You manage to put a lot of information into four sentences, but as a consequence, the sentences become heavy. Try to use at least one shorter sentence to make things lighter.
Good linking and highlighting 'it's clear...'
olaf
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