However the demand for private jets is still very high, the financial crisis did have an impact on the private jet users: the most privileged air travellers are flying fewer hours. Due to the high fuel prices and the convulsion in financial markets most private jet owners are strongly reducing their flight activity and some are even putting their aircraft up for sale.
Despite this being happening, several business jet makers are still confident, because they have new orders for smaller jets. Jack Pelton, chief executive of Cessna, says: “Growth will probably slow but there will still be growth.”
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However [you need 'although' here, not 'however'] the demand for private jets is still very high, the financial crisis did have an impact on the private jet users: the most privileged air travellers are flying fewer hours. Due to the high fuel prices and the convulsion in financial markets [add comma here] most private jet owners are strongly reducing their flight activity and some are even putting their aircraft up for sale. Despite this being [omit 'being'] happening, several business jet makers are still confident, because they have new orders for smaller jets. Jack Pelton, chief executive of Cessna, says: “Growth will probably slow but there will still be growth.”
Mind the use of however/although (check GDTBE on linking words) and try to rephrase more. Some parts were literal transcriptions of the original text.
Olaf
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