Youth is the future...for banks
Nowadays banks do everything to attract young people because once they have an account in a certain bank they stay there mostly for the rest of their lives. A bank can offer youngsters several different saving and current accounts, even unborn babies are able to have one. Most of these offers are similar to one another but banks will try to be unique by giving certain presents or promotions to make young clients really want that specific account. A new way to convince our youth is by sponsoring their sporting activities and culture events because in that way they are not even able to forget about banks.
Bostyn jasmine
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Youth is the future...for banks
Nowadays [add a comma] banks do everything [anything] to attract young people because once they have an account in a certain bank they stay there mostly for the rest of their lives. A bank can offer youngsters several different saving and current accounts, even unborn babies are able to have one. Most of these offers are similar to one another but banks will try to be unique by giving certain presents or promotions to make young clients really want that specific account. A new way to convince our youth is by sponsoring their sporting activities and culture events because in that way they are not even able to forget about banks.
Last sentence: 'they' refers to 'youth' but that's not clear from the grammatical structure.
For the rest, good flow.
olaf
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